Thursday, March 1, 2007

punchy first lines

Boxing Today on the Legal Writing Institute's listserv, University of Missouri-Columbia's legal writing prof John Mollenkamp shared a wonderful lead from a news story to illustrate to students the impact of starting a brief's fact statement "with a punch" (quoting Richard Neumann). This one successfully draws the reader in and keeps her reading. Here's the first line of that story:

"A jazz musician was injured Friday after jumping from a burning motor home driven by a one-time roller skating stripper from Lodi."

Prof. Mollenkamp credits humorist Dave Barry’s blog for bringing the story to his attention. (You remember Barry, don't you? Mr. Language Person?) We thank everyone responsible for inspiring and sharing this gem.


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